Writing Contest: Good night little child
Re: Writing Contest: Good night little child
Oh what last place I can't belieeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeve it.
I'll go through the other entries at some point, too. Just not right this moment. =P
Um, I don't particularly know what to say about that last story though? Other than good luck and hope to see you around somewhere else, I guess. I'm not good at sappy goodbyes, so I won't do one. See ya, Clam.
I'll go through the other entries at some point, too. Just not right this moment. =P
Um, I don't particularly know what to say about that last story though? Other than good luck and hope to see you around somewhere else, I guess. I'm not good at sappy goodbyes, so I won't do one. See ya, Clam.
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Re: Writing Contest: Good night little child
I really didn't expect to get such a high place. I'm slightly baffled, but also very happy. Due to procrastination my entry was pretty rushed, and I would have liked to flesh it out a lot more. I'm still satisfied with how it turned out.
Thank you, Clamestarebla, for hosting this, and I'm sad to see you go. With how little I know about you, you seem like a cool dude. But, well, only do what makes you happy.
Congratulations to the winners! I haven't read any entry yet, but I will and probably comment on them.
The formatting of my text seems to have gotten screwed up somewhere along the process. Here's how it's supposed to look: https://www.dropbox.com/s/a4am23o4kyjiz ... p.pdf?dl=0
Thank you, Clamestarebla, for hosting this, and I'm sad to see you go. With how little I know about you, you seem like a cool dude. But, well, only do what makes you happy.
Congratulations to the winners! I haven't read any entry yet, but I will and probably comment on them.
The formatting of my text seems to have gotten screwed up somewhere along the process. Here's how it's supposed to look: https://www.dropbox.com/s/a4am23o4kyjiz ... p.pdf?dl=0
You're awesome.
Re: Writing Contest: Good night little child
6th place WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
I'm glad I got a laugh outta ya, clam. Have fun elsewhere on the internet!!
I'm glad I got a laugh outta ya, clam. Have fun elsewhere on the internet!!
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Re: Writing Contest: Good night little child
Honestly, I was just participating for the sake of participating. I wasn't really trying to win. That said, if my story was so confusing, why didn't it get last place?
Also... I honestly hope you find a place on the internet that makes you feel welcome. I also hope you can remember any good things that happened to you on the talkhaus.
I was looking forward to a second writing contest, but now? Now I just want you to find a place that you feel is worth your time.
Good bye, Clam Lord. May the gods of literature smile upon you.
Also... I honestly hope you find a place on the internet that makes you feel welcome. I also hope you can remember any good things that happened to you on the talkhaus.
I was looking forward to a second writing contest, but now? Now I just want you to find a place that you feel is worth your time.
Good bye, Clam Lord. May the gods of literature smile upon you.
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Re: Writing Contest: Good night little child
Because last place was literally a blank page. You can't get any objectively worse than that.HamsterZerg wrote:Honestly, I was just participating for the sake of participating. I wasn't really trying to win. That said, if my story was so confusing, why didn't it get last place?
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So forgive me if I'm making a mountain out of a molehill....but "find igens leap (muddel KB)" is just the premise of James Joyce's "Finnegans Wake" with different words. And if it was anything else, where the entire point wasn't the style of the writing, I guess I would just pass it off but since the style is the entire appeal of both of these (to me at least) it just sort of bothers me.
Seriously, see if you can even tell the two apart:
Like...is this an homage? Technique, style, multilingual puns, even the way you begin and end the entry with a sentence that gets cut off in the middle...I applaud you for actually taking the time to make your own version of it but it just feels kinda empty to me since it's been done to death in Joyce's original.
I'm sorry if this isn't an important thing but....yeah this was going to be a more eloquent closing sentence but I guess I can't think of what else to say.
Seriously, see if you can even tell the two apart:
Like...is this an homage? Technique, style, multilingual puns, even the way you begin and end the entry with a sentence that gets cut off in the middle...I applaud you for actually taking the time to make your own version of it but it just feels kinda empty to me since it's been done to death in Joyce's original.
I'm sorry if this isn't an important thing but....yeah this was going to be a more eloquent closing sentence but I guess I can't think of what else to say.
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Re: Writing Contest: Good night little child
Spoiled for anyone who wants to avoid any sort of explanation for my silly piece before reading it:
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Re: Writing Contest: Good night little child
Okay, I started doing some reading and I'll post updates when I get around to everyone's stories. I'm doing them in order that they're listed in the collection
10TH PLACE
8TH PLACE (the first one)
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Re: Writing Contest: Good night little child
haha skip mine. It's also a joke entry, but it's so confusing that you probably won't be able to tell even who the main characters are, much less what's actually going on. I got inspired by FLCL when writing it.
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Nope. You submitted an entry, so I'm gonna read it. No getting off that easily :p
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Re: Writing Contest: Good night little child
I'll give you a cookie if you can tell who the main character is, including who the character's parents are. I'll give you another cookie if you can tell who is in the obligatory ship.
I'll give you the cookie jar if you can tell what the canon universe is like, and what happens in the story (so far) with 60% accuracy.
I'll give you the cookie jar if you can tell what the canon universe is like, and what happens in the story (so far) with 60% accuracy.
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Challenge accepted, but I have a feeling you'll be keeping your cookies.
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Re: Writing Contest: Good night little child
Success :DRedMageMike wrote:...I'm so glad you said this was a joke entry, but this would be super hard to critique seriously... I read an excerpt to my fiancee and she thought it was cute, so there's at least that. But yeah, the narrative is rather all over the place.
Cookie!RedMageMike wrote:I'm guessing the main character is Syrup-chan, whose parents are Delicious French Toast and Scrambled Eggs.
Another cookie, but not quite the food jar. A few countries of the new continent basically ARE foodland, but what's most important to note is these quotes:RedMageMike wrote:As for the canon universe, I'm guessing it's foodland
So, more than just being foodland, it's a big soup of concepts and ideas merging with reality to create some pretty messed-up stuff. I was just wanting to see if you could get those two things without going into all of the stupid science explanations.
I didn't see the obligatory ship question answered, but I'll just say it now: it was between Coffee, who was Syrup-chan's dog, and Corn Dog, a former member of the ISA. (International Sausage Association)
... at this point in time, Corn Dog's eyes met with Coffee the dog's, and the two were in love.
... Corn Dog asked, letting herself be hugged by Coffee the Dog.
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Ooooh! Totally forgot about the ship thing haha. I kinda inferred a bit from the 10th dimension thing, but yeah, I didn't entirely piece it together. Whoops ^^;
Anyways, more reviews!
7th
6th
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Anyways, more reviews!
7th
6th
5th
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Piter Lauchy wrote:RedMageMike wrote:
Anyways, on to the final set of reviews as well as a few comments on my story.
4th
Paranormal Specialist
3rd
En'ka Ma'ru: Shoru's Legacy
1st (not mine)
And finally, a bit about my piece
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Re: Writing Contest: Good night little child
I don't think I ever expected to finish during the contest. A few days before the contest was announced, I had outlined the plot for a separate project I was planning on working on but will probably never actually get to. I found out about the contest (posted on my birthday, coincidentally) and wondered what I would write about, then had an idea to make a story out of this video game plot I had just come up with. I started writing at the beginning of the plot, and then I thought maybe I should start with how it got to that point, came up with some ideas, and started with that scene, trying to incorporate all the background I'd already been developing.RedMageMike wrote:3rd
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I'll admit, I don't like the "textbook" descriptions much myself. They sound basic and plain, but at that point I had neither the time nor the energy to work them in the way I wanted to. I would have liked to weave them into character dialogue, maybe tie in some background when it was pertinent to the scene. Also, I've basically done zero creative writing outside of schoolwork, so I wasn't too sure on how to properly format things, even after looking it up.
I really want to continue developing this world (starting with this story as a base) and have been giving it more thought, and I hope the project can help me overcome some psychological obstacles keeping me from achieving my goals. The fact that people are actually interested in what I did end up submitting means a lot to me. (The reactions to my MaGLX2 "creation" have put me in slightly better spirits, too)
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Yeah, I can understand what you mean about psychological barriers and stuff.DoctorSponge wrote:I really want to continue developing this world (starting with this story as a base) and have been giving it more thought, and I hope the project can help me overcome some psychological obstacles keeping me from achieving my goals. The fact that people are actually interested in what I did end up submitting means a lot to me. (The reactions to my MaGLX2 "creation" have put me in slightly better spirits, too)RedMageMike wrote:3rd
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